Wednesday, February 1, 2012

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My friends came over, and we all piled into the car.
My friends came over, and one by one we packed tightly into the car like sardines.

Because it was Friday night, there were a lot of people waiting in line to get a table.
Because it was a Friday night, there were large crowds where ever we went. It was next to impossible to find a table.

Again, during our meal, my friends and I received strange looks from the others in the restaurant.
Again, during our meal, my friends and I got strange looks from the restaurant goers. They would walk past, confused, trying to determine if the baby was real or not. We looked too young to have kids already.

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